my mother name is zhangyan ,she's thirty. my mothre love vegetables and peanuts.she's very pretty.she's tall and thin.she's do housework.she's straight hair . she can make delicious food. this is mothre!
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my mother's name is zhang yan. she's thirty. she's tall and thin, and she's got straight hair. she's very pretty. she loves vegetables and peanuts. she can cook delicious food. she's doing housework now!
this is my mother!
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