my name is xin. i'm el*n years old.i think i'm cl*r and beautiful.my hobby is play basketball.i like it, i can play basketball very well.there are four people in my family.they are my mother,my father,my bother and i.i like them and they loveme,we are very happy.i like friends.i have got lots of friends.we often do homework and play *s on weekends.
this is me,do you like me?
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my name is xin. i'm el*n years old. i think i'm cl*r and beautiful. my hobby is playing basketball. and i can play it very well. there are four people in my family. they are my mother, my father, my bother and i. i love them and they love me. we live a very happy life. i like * friends. so i have got lots of friends. we often do homework and play *s together on weekends.
this is me, do you like me?
修改老师：crystal 老师
六年级:张汝昕
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