i was one day reading the news* when i saw a little kid falling down from the sky; i was the only one who can save him in time for i was on the first floor. i rushed out of the building, and ran outside. i knew that this was very, very extremely *erous, but if the child falls down he will probably die of pain. he brought a *g blanket, and then a pillow, he calculated the area was a 100 percent sure that the child would not die. the child came falling, and falling; “poof!!” he landed on the pillow.
i was curious and glad that the child still had his life, and got a reward of fifty pounds of gold and one bag of silver. i was very happy. but when it was night time, i heard an “i’m coming,” noise. i woke up, and saw a *g light, then appeared a little flying cat! that was very, very strange. i rubbed my eyes, and pinched *rywhere to make sure that it wasn’t a dream. but it was true. the cat said, “hello, i am plad, and i am a *; with me you can tran*orm and save the day *ry time.”
i was astonished and said, “excuse me, but why did you choose me?” the flying cat replied. “because that you saved a falling kid, and that was a challenge to defeat. you are now my rightful owner.”
i put on a ring that the flying cat gave me, and went back to sleep. in the morning, i decided to test out my tran*orming, “plad, claw set!” and then a strange thing happened, i tran*ormed into “cat no r !” i tried my powers, and then i saw a sort of bug that i recognize, “ladybug!” i was going to find her when i found out that my ring was flashing, i said, “claws off!” then i tran*ormed back. i was very excited to enjoy my first lesson of being cat no r . i was quite astonished, and happy
at night, i thought i heard another noise, “not again!” suddenly a round of ball came to me again and said, “don’t worry, i am teeky, and you cat no r is going to work with ladybug to defeat villains.”
i was astonished again, and then teeky vanished from sight,
i decided to follow her, but i thought maybe next time, for i didn’t want to bother the kid or girl or other people from sleeping.
and so i have got a job from plad to save the world.
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i was one day reading the news* when i saw a little kid falling down from the sky. i was the only one who could save him in time for i was on the first floor. i rushed out of the building, and ran outside. i knew that this was extremely *erous, but if the child fell down he would probably die of pain. i brought a *g blanket, and then a pillow. after calculating the height, i was 100 percent sure that the child would not die. the child kept falling, and falling; “poof!!” he landed on the pillow.
i was curious and glad that the child still had his life, and i got a reward of fifty pounds of gold and one bag of silver. i was very happy. but when it was night time, i heard an “i’m coming,” noise. i woke up, and saw a *g beam of light, then appeared a little flying cat! that was very, very strange. i rubbed my eyes, and pinched *rywhere to make sure that it wasn’t a dream. but it was true. the cat said, “hello, i am plad, and i am a *; with me you can tran*orm and save the day *ry time.”
i was astonished and said, “excuse me, but why did you choose me?” the flying cat replied, “because you saved a falling kid, and that was a challenge to defeat. you are now my rightful owner.”
i put on a ring that the flying cat gave me, and went back to sleep. in the morning, i decided to test out my tran*orming, “plad, claw set!” and then a strange thing happened, i tran*ormed into “cat no r !” i tried my powers, and then i saw a sort of bug that i recognize, “ladybug!” i was going to find her when i found out that my ring was flashing, i said, “claws off!” then i tran*ormed back. i was very excited to enjoy my first lesson of being cat no r . i was quite astonished, and happy.
at night, i heard another noise, “not again!” suddenly a round ball came to me again and said, “don’t worry, i am teeky, and you cat no r is going to work with ladybug to defeat villains.”
i was astonished again, and then teeky vanished from sight.
i decided to follow her, but i thought maybe next time, for i didn’t want to bother the kid or girl or other people from sleeping.
and so i have got a job from plad to save the world.
四年级:欧阳雨鹭
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