hello,my name is tian jiaxin ,i'm twelve year age .i had a happy family,they are four people in my family，there are my father,my mother,my brother and i . i like me. do you like me?
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hello, my name is tian jiaxin. i'm twelve years age. i have a happy family. there are four people in my family. they are my father, my mother, my brother and i. they all like me. how about you?
六年级:田佳鑫
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