winter was gone,spring comes.my favorite season is spring,because it's very beautiful. lovely girl-chun, strode the world came to light steps, and that picture will be a very lively scene in all directions then came, the whole world like a long sleep just wakened up.in spring,the weather is aways sunny and rainy,it's not cold and not hot,it's warmer and warmer. and the trees become green and the flowers give off fragrance there are many butterflies and bees over the flowers. the butterflies are dancing and the bees are singing. sometimes it rains. it usually rains quietly. the rain moistens the trees and the flowers. i think they may say, “we’re very thirsty. the rain is very good. it can * us.” what a beautiful scene! the *rds are singing in the sky,they are happy.the animals will go out to play.many people like to go out and enjoy the sunshine. i like to fly kites,plant trees and see the beautiful flowers. spring is planting dreams season .it is colorful,i think it's a wonderful season. let’s hug in spring!
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my favorite season is spring, because it's very beautiful. in spring, *rything comes back to life after the long cold winter. the sun shines brightly, and the weather is always sunny. it's not cold and not hot, and it becomes warmer and warmer. the trees become green and the flowers give off fragrance. there are many butterflies and bees over the flowers. the butterflies are dancing and the bees are singing. sometimes it rains. it usually rains quietly. the rain moistens the trees and the flowers. what a beautiful scene! the *rds are singing in the sky happily. many people like going out and enjoy the sunshine. i like flying kites, planting trees and looking at the beautiful flowers. spring is colorful. i think it's a wonderful season. let’s hug in spring!
修改老师：crystal老师
初一:桑宇晶
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