of course in the whole wild world, there is only one place with which is the coldest; and that is in antarctica.
it was a beautiful fact that once or twice a year, there was going to be a *g parade; now nobody *r heard of that story; but let me tell you all about it, one the north pole until all the way to its opposite.
after a day or two, the magnificent magician of the great london, is ready to travel for its reward, of saving he town from a *erous earthquake. after that, he *ed the poor people recover and saved a lot of townspeople that were suffering for life.
when he was fully packed to go and travel, he double checked *rything had he was going to use or should i say need. then he went to the airport ready to take off they always made sure safety first. when it was ready, the ma*r counted, “one, two three, get set; go!” and then the plane took off. it flew a good distance, until it reached the beach. there the man enjoyed his life, but was not quite astonished a *t.
when he was sick of that place, he decided to change another place to enjoy his life. and so on he hopped onto the plan. when it took off, the man was wondering what place are they arriving now? when he opened his eyes, he found himself in the north pole. there he rested and enjoyed his life. when it was time to go and find another place, he decided to go to its opposite; antarctica. he was so very, very, very excited.
the plane took off again, and it flew a while until they reached antarctica; it was quite a long trip, but when they finally landed on land, the man as so excited that he switched on his clothes immediately and went to play.
he was having a very good time; at last he chose his place.
he went to the ma*r of the airport, and said that he could now rest; because he had finished his work in finding his place of life.
he was very glad, and when he was ready to build his home, he thought about the penguins. he had played with them a good time; at last he finished building his house. he had made friends with the penguins too.
happy day!
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of course in the whole wild world, there is only one place which is the coldest; and that is in antarctica.
it was a beautiful fact that once or twice a year, there was going to be a *g parade; now nobody has *r heard of that story; but let me tell you all about it.
after a day or two, the magnificent magician of the great london was ready to travel for its reward of saving the town from a *erous earthquake. after that, he *ed the poor people recover and saved a lot of townspeople that were suffering for life.
when he was sick of that place, he decided to change another place to enjoy his life, so he took a plane. when he opened his eyes, he found himself in the north pole. there he rested and enjoyed his life. when it was time to go and find another place, he decided to go to its opposite; antarctica. he was very, very, very excited.
the plane took off again. it was quite a long trip, but when they finally landed on land, the man was so excited that he switched on his clothes immediately and went to play.
he was having a very good time; at last he chose his place.
he went to the ma*r of the airport, and said that he could rest because he had finished his work in finding his place of life.
he was very glad, and when he was ready to build his home, he thought about the penguins. he had had a good time with them. at last he finished building his house. he had made friends with the penguins too.
四年级:欧阳雨鹭
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