my name is yuan quan. i like winter best.because l can play in the snow and make a snowman. winter is white and pretty.my mam and sister also like winter.i often make a snowman and play in the snow on winter. sometimes i go shopping with my family.
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my name is yuan quan. i like winter best. because l can play with the snow and make a snowman. in winter, the world is all white. my mum and sister also like winter. we often make snowmen and have a snowball fight together. it is very interesting.
修改老师：crystal 老师
五年级:袁泉
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