the sky is blue. *rds are flying freely in the sky. the river is clean. many fish are swimming in the river. i am so excited, because i can go to the zoo!
in the zoo, i can see many animals. there are lions, elephants, rab*ts, tigers, pandas, sheep and so on. look! the lions are running. they are so fierce. the elephants are drinking water. the
rab*ts are eating carrots. they are really cute! the tigers are walking. the pandas are eating
bamboos. the sheep are eating grasses. the bears are sleeping. oh, what a lazy bear!
my father’s sitting on a bench reading a news*. mother is taking a photo of the animals. my grandfather is eating lunch with my grandmother. my friends are playing on the lawn.
how nice a day it is!
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the sky is blue. *rds are flying freely in the sky. it's really a nice day today! i am so excited, because i can go to the zoo with my family!
in the zoo, i can see a lot of animals. there are lions, elephants, rab*ts, tigers, pandas, sheep and so on. look! the lions are running. they are so fierce. the elephants are drinking water. the rab*ts are eating carrots. they are really cute! the tigers are walking. the pandas are eating bamboos. the sheep are eating grass. the bears are sleeping. oh, what lazy bears!
my father’s sitting on a bench reading a news*. mother is taking a photo of the animals. my grandfather is eating lunch with my grandmother. my friends are playing on the lawn.
how nice the day is!
五年级:周子涵
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