my family and i went to the seaside .my dad went fishing in the sae.my mum unber the umbrella.she read a book. my uncle ate ice cream.my consins ate bread.my brothers nade a sandcastle.my sisters basked on the sunny beach.mike went swimming in the sea.kate and i played football.we were very happy.
修改后：
my family and i went to the seaside. my dad went fishing in the sea. my mum stayed under the umbrella. she read a book. my uncle ate an ice cream. my consins ate bread. my brothers made a sandcastle. my sisters bathed on the sunny beach. mike went swimming in the sea. kate and i played football. we were very happy.
修改老师：crystal 老师
六年级:吕晓燕
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