summer holiday is coming.i have some plans for this vacation(myself).first,i will sleep a long time ,because this term is very tired.then ,i'm going to beijing with my sister and brother .the great wall and beihai park are in beijing. the beihai park is very beautiful .we will stay in beijing for 7 days!second ,my family will be going to went to my hometown .we will visit my grandparents .last , i'm going to do my homework .and i will get ready for the new term.this is my summer holiday .do you think about?
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summer holiday is coming. ihave madesome plans for it.
first, i will sleep till i wake up natrually. because i had a busy term, and i am still very tired.then, i'm going to beijing with my sister and brother.we want to see the great wall and beihai park there. i leanred from the book that beihai park is very beautiful. we will stay in beijing for 7 days! second, i am going to my hometown with my family. we will visit my grandparents. at last , i'm going to do my homework. and i will get ready for the new term.
this is my summer holiday. how you think of it?
修改老师：andy老师
初二:郭宏凯
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