i like spring best.because spring is so beautiful!it's spring so warm and sunny.i like go on a picnic in spring.i often go to a park is weekend. be read books on sunday.the sangwich is my favonrite food.drink tea is my favourite.in the spring is cool. today is spring last a day.fiy a kite is a outside.hug is the beautiful spring.i with my fried and my parents together hug spring.love you,spring!
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i like spring best because spring is so beautiful! it's warm and sunny in spring, so i can have a picnic with my family and friends. we often go to park at weekends. we bring lots of food and drinks. my favorite food is sandwiches and i like tea best. we can also enjoy reading there. and we often fly kites there. we have a great time! i love spring!
修改老师：crystal 老师
六年级:杨怡蕊
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