*rybody is good, my chinese name is chen yinuo, my english name is lina. i come from china zhejiang jinhua yiwu xiang shan primary school, is a primary school student, is also a *g duiwei school. i'm thir* years old, height 1.6 meters, i am a lively lovable girl, i am beautiful, sunshine, warm, generous, perfect is a good girl, i am the sun bright, happy *ry day. i live in a happy family, there are three in my family, my father, mother and me, i love my mom and dad and my family. my achi*ment is very good, chinese, maths, english, science, are leading the way in all the subjects, i'm very proud for that. my teacher is a good *er, students good example, i unity, friendly, positive, the students are willing to make friends with me, so i have many friends, i feel very happy. would you like to make friends with me?
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hello, *ryone, my chinese name is chen yinuo, and my english name is lina. i come from yiwu of zhejiang. i study in xiangshan primary school. i'm thir* years old and 1.6 meters in height. i am a lovely girl. i live in a happy family. there are three people in my family, my father, mother and me. i love my family. at school, i work hard and do well in chinese, math, english, and science. my parents are very proud of me. my teachers are kind and generous, and often * me with my study. i am a warm-hearted and friendly girl, so the students are willing to make friends with me. i have many friends at school, and i feel very happy with them. would you like to make friends with me?
修改老师：crystal 老师
六年级:陈一诺
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