the sky miss white clouds, just as i miss home, but i always can not meet with my hometown. i met the clear lake home in a dream, like the bright eyes, looked at me and tell the mind. i met home in my dream of wild grapes, really sweet! to reconcile the anguish in my heart. i came home in the dream garden, fruit fragrance, really good! small fish miss the river, just as i miss home, i miss all the home! i miss my grandmother, miss me back when she gave me a sweet hug, i miss the praise of my grandmother, i miss home!
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the sky misses white clouds, just as i miss home, but i always can not meet my hometown.
i dreamt of the clear lake in my hometown. it was just like the bright eye, looking at me and telling me something. i dreamt of wild grapes in my hometown, they were really sweet! to reli* the pain in my heart, i could only come home in my dream.
i miss home! i miss my grandmother, miss her sweet hug!
六年级:潘文静
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